如何讓老師為你代言?三篇推薦信範文及分析

    推薦信在大學申請中有多重要？按照哈佛大學招生主任威廉姆·菲茨西蒙斯的說法，它們「極其重要」。
    對於學生而言，了解推薦信範本可以幫助其從自己老師那裡得到更好的推薦信；對於老師而言，這些範本可以為其推薦自己的學生提供參考和靈感。下面，我們選擇了三篇推薦信範本，並對其進行了分析，供大家參考。
    首先，讓我們談談推薦信在大學申請中的作用。
推薦信為什麼非常重要？
    大部分四年制大學招生官，尤其是私立大學，都會強調他們對學生的考查是「全面」的。因此，他們著意尋找「立體化」的申請者，而不是單純根據考試成績做評估。鑑於招生官在大部分情況下無法親自了解學生，推薦信及學生的個人陳述就在展示申請者的獨特品質和智力水平上起到很大作用。
    老師的推薦信，尤其是那些非常了解自己學生的老師所寫的推薦信，在申請中起到了很大作用。如果老師可以在推薦信中表達對學生的強烈支持，突出學生的學術能力及其他特質，那麼就會產生非常積極的效果。
    現在讓我們看一看這些範本。第一篇來自一位英語老師，第二篇來自一位物理老師，最後一篇來自一位數學老師。
    第一篇文章推薦的學生叫做Sara,她熱愛寫作和詩歌。

範文1（譯文）:
親愛的招生委員會，
    我非常高興能夠在Sara十一年級的時候做她的英語老師。上課第一天，她對文學的敏感、對閱讀、寫作和創造性表達的熱情、對複雜概念和文本的解釋能力就讓我吃驚不已！這種天賦不僅表現在課堂上，也在課堂之外。Sara是一個有天賦的文學批評者和詩人。我推薦她去繼續學習深造並成為作家。
    Sara能夠察覺文學中的微妙含義，並能懂得背後的寫作目的。她還用一年的時間完成了一篇論文。在這篇文章中，她對比了三個不同時間段的文學作品，並從文化和歷史兩個角度進行了分析。當她要求在全班同學面前進行論文答辯的時候，她清晰而有力的陳述自己的結論，並能夠全面考慮提出的問題並充分作答。在課堂外，Sara繼續她的文學追求，這尤其體現在詩歌方面。她的詩歌在我們學校的文學雜誌及電子雜誌上均有刊登。她是一個富有洞察力的、敏銳的、深入了解自己人，不斷探索關於藝術、寫作及人類處境領域的問題。
    在整個學年中，Sara一直積極參與各種討論並幫助其他同學。她關懷他人的天性讓她與團隊成員合作融洽，因為她非常尊重別人的想法——即使在別人與自己意見不一致的情況下。當我們舉行一個關於槍枝法律的辯論時，她選擇了與自己意見相反的一方進行辯論。她解釋說，這樣做是讓自己學會理解別人，鍛鍊自己從新的角度進行思考的能力，從而可以多角度的深入理解這個話題。整個學年，Sara都表現出這樣一種開明包容的態度，無論是對於別人的觀點還是情緒或立場。另外，她還有敏銳的洞察力。這些品質，讓她成為一名優秀的文學專業學生和很有潛力的作家。
    我非常確信，Sara將在未來做出大的成績。所以我強烈推薦她就讀貴學校的本科專業。她有天賦並非常關心他人，有敏銳直覺並專注與自己的夢想。她不斷的尋求建設性意見來提高自己的寫作水平，這對於一名高中生來說非常難得。她的確是一名出類拔萃的學生，能給周圍的人留下深刻印象。如果您有任何問題，歡迎聯繫我。（我的郵箱地址：***@gmail.com）       
真誠的,
Ms. Scribe
英語教師

範文分析
    Scribe老師對於Sara本人及其文學能力給予了很高的評價。在表達上，她的語言詳實而有力。她沒有空洞的說Sara是一個好學生，而是說她能夠對複雜概念和文本做清楚的解釋，能夠察覺文學中的微妙表述。她稱Sara有敏銳洞察力、了解自己、對事物的認識非常深刻。
    這些詞句並非隨手拈來，而是需要老師花費時間仔細斟酌。如此用心的結果，是提供了一篇具有說服力的推薦信，突出了學生獨特的品質。
    Scribe老師還用實例支持了自己對於Sara的看法。她提到了Sara的論文，描述了她如何進行答辯，回答挑戰性問題的。她還舉了辯論賽的例子，反映了Sara的包容、開明的精神。
    除了用實例反映學生的智力水平和個人品質之外，Scribe老師還談到了Sara的未來目標。她指出Sara在寫作方面的天賦——尤其是詩歌，並且在提高寫作水平上不懈努力著。
    從這篇文章內容詳實、用詞精準、篇幅較長，可以看出Scribe老師在推薦學生上花費了時間和精力，也看出她對Sara的信心。她非常了解自己的學生，並且樂意為她寫一篇有說服力的推薦信，這些對評委全面評估Sara起到積極的作用。     

範文2（譯文）：
親愛的招生委員會,
    我在此非常高興的推薦Stacy申請貴校工程專業。Stacy是我執教15年以來遇到的最優秀的學生之一。在她11年級的時候我作為她的物理老師，建議她參加了機器人俱樂部。現在，看到她在12年級的尖子生班裡名列前茅，我一點不感覺意外。她對物理、數學及科學有著強烈的興趣和天賦。在這些領域，她有著超於同齡人的能力和熱情，這讓她成為貴校工程專業的理想人選。
    Stacy是一名有著強烈感知能力、頭腦敏捷的學生，在數學和自然科學領域非常有天賦。她總是在好奇心的驅使下研究萬物的運行規律，小到學校圖書館裡面老舊的電腦硬碟，大到宇宙引力。她在期末最後的一個項目讓我印象尤其深刻，是關於噪音吸收方面的研究的。她說，這是在自己練吉他的時候，因為不想讓父母被噪音幹擾，所以產生了這樣的想法。在機器人俱樂部裡面，她是一個重要的領導人物。她總是熱切的與他人分享自己的知識和技能。我曾經讓學生們自己備課，輪流在課後的研討會中做主講。當輪到Stacy時，她精心準備了一堂關於月球航天的課，非常生動有趣。她還讓每個同學都站起來模仿星球運行。她是唯一一名在講課結束獲得熱烈掌聲的學生老師。
    Stacy的個人魅力同她的學術成績一樣引人注目。她在班級裡一直開朗而活躍，並非常具有幽默感。Stacy是推動項目進行的完美人選，而且她清楚何時該退居幕後，讓別人領導。她快樂的天性和對反饋意見的容納能力，使她一直學習並成長著。這種品質會讓她在大學學習及長遠未來中受益。Stacy就是那種充滿活力、不斷進取的學生，她為班級帶來了生機，讓課堂變成一個安全的智力冒險樂園。
    我強烈推薦Stacy就讀貴校工程專業。無論是實驗設計還是團隊合作，還是自學吉他，她在所做的各項工作中都表現優異。她無窮的好奇心結合冒險精神，是我相信她在未來大學生活及人生道路上的成就具有無限可能。如果您還有任何問題，歡迎與我聯繫（郵箱： ****@gmail.com ）。
    真誠的，
    Ms. Randall
    物理教師

範文分析
    Randall老師在文章開端就鮮明的指出Stacy在班級裡的突出成績:「Stacy是我執教15年以來遇到的最優秀的學生之一」。 這樣的陳述非常不尋常，它會給讀者留下深刻印象。Stacy 給人的感覺是一位特別的學生，也很會選擇推薦老師。
    在推薦信最後的那個例子中，老師運用了詳實而生動的語言，指出Stacy是一名有深刻洞察力、頭腦敏捷的學生，具有知識冒險的信心和幽默感。這些準確、有表現力的語言，使Stacy 的形象躍然紙上，留在了讀者的心目中。
    除了直接的評估判斷外，Randall老師還提供了充分的例子證明Stacy的學術能力和個人品質。其中談到了Stacy在機器人俱樂部上成功的演講，她在團隊項目中的領導作用以及她堅持自學吉他的故事。
    Randall沒有泛泛談每個方面，而是有重點的選取了幾個主題。比如，她將Stacy對音樂的興趣和對物理的研究結合在一起，介紹了她的噪音吸收項目。文中所有的線索都是巧妙串聯在一起的。
    這篇推薦信對於Stacy進入申請的工程專業起到有效的支持作用。Stacy的物理老師欣賞她的技能和遠大目標，她鮮明的表明了自己推薦Stacy的願望。    

範文3（譯文）
親愛的招生委員會，
    非常高興可以向你們推薦我的學生Joe,我曾在他11年級的時候做他的數學老師。Joe在整個學年中不懈努力並快速成長，為整個班級帶來了能量。 他擁有積極的態度及堅定的信念——他相信自己可以不斷進步，這些品質對於一名高中生來說是非常難得的，也是學習過程中不可或缺的因素。我非常確信，他會在未來的學習及人生中，一直努力，鍥而不捨。因此我強烈推薦 Joe在貴校學習。
    Joe不認為自己有數學天賦。他多次跟我說過，那些數字、變量讓他的大腦一片空白。事實上，Joe的確在最開始的時候掙扎著理解各種材料。然而，他對這種狀況的反應讓我非常震撼。當很多學生面對這種課程選擇放棄時，Joe卻能夠將其看作一個很好的挑戰。他總是在放學後留下來用功，還在附近的學校進行補習，在課堂課外積極請教。他的努力，不僅讓自己的成績得以提高，還鼓勵了其他同學放學後留下來補習。Joe的確展示出了不斷成長的心態，並且啟發別人從這個角度看待事物。在Joe的幫助下，班級的學習環境得到改善，所有的同學都能感受到鼓勵和支持，都敢於自由提問。
    Joe堅定的相信自己可以通過練習獲得提高並學習新的技能，這種信心的形成可能來源於他多年作棒球運動員的經歷。他在整個高中階段一直進行棒球運動，並且是棒球隊的種子選手。在學期末的演講中，他設計了一個可以計算和分析平均擊球量的項目，給大家留下深刻印象。雖然他起初的數學很不好，但日積月累的努力終於有了成效，他終於把數學變成了自己感興趣的科目。作為一名老師，看到自己的學生取得這樣的學術成績和個人進步的時候，真的非常欣慰。
    Joe是一個值得信賴的、有幽默感的學生，總是熱心的幫助別人。班裡有他會讓人很愉快。他對自己的信心，尤其在面對困難的時候表現出的積極態度，非常讓人欽佩，這些將成為他的寶貴的人生財富。我相信，他會一如既往的努力、樂觀、持之以恆。所以，我強烈的推薦 Joe申請貴校本科專業。如果您還有其他的問題，歡迎與我聯繫。（郵箱： ***@gmail.com）
    真誠的,
    Mr. Wiles
    數學教師

Joe並不像前兩篇文章中的學生那樣名列前茅並展示出領導能力，在傳統意義上講，他並不是一個非常有成就的學生。然而，這篇推薦信仍舊非常有說服力，即使文中提到了Joe在數學課上苦苦掙扎的故事。那麼，Wiles先生在推薦信中突出了什麼呢？

範文分析
    Wiles先生為學生Joe寫了一篇有力的推薦信，與上面的兩篇範文一樣充滿了熱情和詳實的內容。雖然Joe的數學成績不在班級前列，但他找到了一位有熱情的推薦老師。Joe的學習態度、不懈努力的精神以及不斷成長的心態，給Wiles先生留下了深刻印象。這些品質貫穿在他整個學年中，並且深深感染了其他的同學。
    Wiles先生在推薦信裡重點介紹了Joe強大的內心力量，這些品質是未來的老師非常看重的。即使對於自己不擅長的學科，Joe也非常勤奮並堅持不懈。他不僅特意去尋求額外補習並多多請教，還自始至終相信自己可以不斷進步，掌握新的技能。
    這篇推薦信也非常有效，因為它重點突出，表達出老師對學生的支持，並用實例證明觀點。

    從上述三篇範文中可以看出，老師的推薦信可以在很多方面展示學生。因此，也就在入學申請中佔據了重要位置。那麼，老師和學生要怎麼做才能保證推薦信發揮效力呢？

如何獲得一篇有說服力的推薦信？
    雖然以上範文裡的學生有不同的興趣和性格，但是這些文章卻在根本上有許多相似點。首先，它們都流露出老師的滿腔熱情。老師都在文章中明確的表達了他們對學生的讚賞，並非常熱切的為他們做推薦。
    另外，這些推薦信沒有給人誇大的感覺，因為所有的評論都有相關的例子作支持。生動的故事和充分的實例是支撐評價的最有力的因素。它們也讓文章更加有趣而難忘。Stacy不像其他的工程專業申請生一樣，因為她進行了噪音吸收的研究，讓父母可以在她練習吉他的時候不受幹擾。
    最後，老師們都對學生的個人品質和學術優勢進行了描述——這些這是招生官需要尋找的全面的考查因素。他們表達了對學生未來成就的充分信心。
    作為老師，需要在以上方面充分展示學生；作為學生，需要為老師提供這些方面的基礎材料。 雖然學生們會選擇那些了解他們，對他們觀察仔細的老師為其撰寫推薦信，但仍然需要學生們提供詳細的信息「吹噓」自己的優點，這樣老師就能更好了解理想的推薦信可以包括些什麼。這種方法可以讓學生更加有個性，也可以補充其他材料中寫到的故事。
    雖然老師可能不會讓學生看到推薦信，但雙方的溝通應該自始至終是坦白的、雙向的。這樣才能保證學生和老師一起，寫出充滿熱情、內容詳實、見解獨到的推薦信。

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3 Recommendation Letter Samples from Teachers

How important are recommendation letters in a college application? According to William Fitzsimmons, dean of admissions and financial aid at Harvard, they are "extremely important."

If you're a student, examples of great letters of recommendation can help you understand how to get strong letters yourself from your teachers. If you're a teacher, the examples in this guide will inspire you to support your students strongly as they apply to college. Keep reading for 3 excellent letters from teachers that will get anyone into college, along with expert analysis on why they're so strong.

First, let's understand the role of recommendation letters in your application.

Why are Recommendation Letters Important?

The majority of admissions officers at 4 year colleges, especially private schools, emphasize that their process is holistic. They seek to gain a sense of the student as a "whole person," rather than focusing on pieces of who she is based solely on grades and test scores. Since they rarely meet the student in person, the recommendation letters, along with the student's own personal essay, play a huge role in illuminating her intellectual and personal qualities.

That's why recommendation letters from teachers, especially those who know their students well, carry a great deal of weight in applications. A letter that expresses a strong vote of support, as well as highlights a student's impressive academic and personal strengths, can have a powerful effect on that student's chances of admission.

Let's look at some samples of strong recommendation letters, one from an English teacher, another from a physics teacher, the third from a history teacher, and the final one from a math teacher. Then we'll break down exactly why these letters of recommendation are effective.

The first example recommends Sara, a senior who loves to write and read poetry.

Sample Letter #1: Sara the Poet

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This is a thorough, glowing recommendation for a student that Ms. Scribe clearly knows well. What other features make it stand out as a strong letter of rec?

The Break Down

Ms. Scribe has a high opinion of Sara and her skills at writing and literary analysis. One way that she expresses this is by using powerful and specific language. She doesn't merely say Sara is a good writer. She says she's articulate about difficult concepts and sensitive to the nuances within literature. She calls her insightful and self-aware with shrewd powers of observation.
These descriptors don't happen by accident. Ms. Scribe took the time to choose her words carefully, and that effort paid off with a strong letter that captures Sara's special qualities.
Ms. Scribe also supports her characterization of Sara with examples. She describes her thesis paper and how she responded to questions thoughtfully under the pressured situation of her thesis defense. She gives the example of the debate on gun laws to illustrate Sara's openness to many different points of view.
In addition to illuminating her intellectual and personal strengths and supporting them with specific examples, Ms. Scribe speaks to Sara's goals for the future. She points out that she is talented at writing, poetry specifically, and that she is committed to continuing to improve as a writer in her future.
This letter, by virtue of its wording, length, and specificity, shows that Ms. Scribe took the time and effort to recommend Sara thoughtfully and with conviction. The fact that she knows Sara well and is committed to helping her application succeed with a thoughtful letter further adds weight to her assessment.

Sample Letter #2: Stacy the Engineer

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The Break Down
Ms. Randall plugs for Stacy right off the bat with a statement of outstanding ranking: Stacy is one of the most exceptional students she's had in 15 years of teaching. A statement like this is pretty extraordinary and will make an impact in the mind of its readers. Stacy sounds like a special student, and she chose her recommender well.
Like in the last example, this letter uses strong, specific language, calling Stacy a perceptive and sharp person who has the confidence and good humor to take intellectual risks. Through its accurate and expressive language, this letter helps Stacy come to life in the mind of the reader.
Beyond the evaluation, Ms. Randall gives specific examples of Stacy's academic and personal strengths. She talks about her successful teaching in Robotics Club, her leadership in group projects, and her dedicated practice to teaching herself to play the guitar.
Rather than spreading the letter too thin, Ms. Randall highlights a few core themes. She connects Stacy's love of music with her passion for physics by talking about the frequency-dependent sound absorption project. All the threads tie together in a nice, memorable bow.
This letter is a strong vote of support for Stacy's application to an engineering program. Her physics teacher admires Stacy's skills and goals, and she made it clear that Stacy had her highest recommendation in this letter.
This next example comes from a math teacher. Let's see what Mr. Wiles has to say about Joe.

Sample Letter #3: Joe the Hard Worker

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While the students featured in the first two examples were top of their class or demonstrated leadership in the school, Joe isn't a top achiever in the traditional sense. However, this recommendation is still a strong one, even if it says he struggled in the teacher's class. What does Mr. Wiles focus on to recommend Joe?

The Break Down
Mr. Wiles writes a strong letter for Joe, with the same kind of enthusiasm and specific examples as the other two letters. Even though Joe may not have gotten the strongest grades in his math class, he found an enthusiastic recommender in his math teacher. Mr. Wiles was extremely impressed with Joe's attitude, effort, and growth mindset, which he demonstrated throughout the year and inspired in his fellow classmates.
Mr. Wiles focuses on Joe's substantial personal strengths, ones that would likely be impressive to his future educators. Even in a subject that may not come naturally to him, Joe is diligent and committed. He's self-conscious about asking questions or seeking extra help, and he retains a strong belief in himself that he can continuously learn, improve, and acquire new skills.
This letter, like the others, is effective because it is focused, supportive, and backed up with examples. As you can tell from these examples, recommendations can communicate a great deal about a student. Because of this, they can have a powerful impact on a student's chances of admission. So what can teachers and students do to make sure they are sending a strong recommendation letter that will help their chances?

How to Get a Strong Recommendation Letter？
While these letters are about different students with different interests, they share certain fundamental features. One, they sound excited and enthusiastic. The teachers clearly communicate that they are impressed by these students and eager to help them get into college.
At the same time, the letters don't go overboard because they have examples to back up their assessments. Specific examples and stories are key for backing up the assessment. Plus, they make a letter more interesting and memorable. Rather than just another engineering applicant, Stacy is the student who researched sound-absorption to spare her parents from hours of guitar scales.
Finally, the teachers all discuss their students' personal strengths, along with their academic strengths. They present the holistic view that admissions officers are looking for, along with their strong vote of confidence in the students' future success.
Teachers should incorporate all these features into their letters, and students should help provide them with the raw material to write about. While students should choose a teacher who knows them well and has stories and observations to share, they should also give their teachers a detailed "brag sheet" and let them know what would go into their ideal letter. That way it can be even more personalized and complement the story the student is telling in the rest of her application.
While recommenders may or may not share their letters with students, there should still be open, two way communication when the student makes her request. That way students and teachers can work together to produce an insightful, enthusiastic, and specific letter of recommendation to send to colleges.

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