找工作階段,很多人都會通過LinkedIn或者到處打聽聯繫方式來找同胞內推。一畝三分地小k從公司員工的角度提了一些建議,幫助大家提高回復率。
原文如下:
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過去1-2年收過100+求內推的請求,或者「套磁」類請求,絕大部分國人,自我介紹部分差別特別大。
最近收到了一老印的code email from linkedin,可以說是我見過最好的自我介紹,國人經驗是他三倍的人都沒有他這個寫的這麼漂亮。隱藏具體內容的貼出來,給大家參考下。
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國人的自我介紹經常是這樣:
- 我是個新畢業生,我也不知道簡歷這樣行不行,請你看一下幫我找個合適的職位?
- 這樣我不點開resume仔細讀,並且替你search半天,肯定是無法內推的了。就不行把自己是博士還是碩士直接說清楚?就不能把你大致會什麼說說?除非top n畢業(H, MIT, S, Berkeyley, UW),我一般不會engage,因為成功概率非常低而付出effort太多。這樣的來信實在太多,茹無法一一輔導。
- 我新畢業生,我什麼什麼什麼什麼全都會。是全能無敵專家
- 哇您大牛,會的內容是我的兩倍。打開簡歷一看,fresh MS, 項目3個,具體內容一看就知道是course project,非常水。何必呢。。。。
- 我想學數科、我想申請你們公司、我想轉專業、我想了解一下這個行業, 請你給我講講你平常做什麼?你這周什麼時候有20分鐘,咱們通一下電話。
- 老闆您好
其實我也非常希望見到漂亮的國人簡歷,我不知道多想往組裡多推薦幾個國人!!!!!!! 我這裡有職位要招人!!!
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再來看老印的郵件。
上來寒暄問好
I wish to apply for Data Scientist Role at ** Data Science team as posted on Linkedin and careers page below for the San Francisco location.
I completed my Masters in *** from *** University last year. Prior to that I have close to *** years of professional experience in advanced analytics domain having worked with *** and **** in their *** division.Before my masters I was part of Data Science *** team in *** Inc.
In my recent work as *** in *****, San Francisco , I worked on machine learning models on Big data business problems.
Am currently building a Recommender System Product as a Data Scientist where I am building the algorithm and also acting as Product Manager to manage the whole product development cycle.
In my previous work with ***, I built a Response model using Logistic Regression machine learning technique which resulted in generating an incremental revenue of $1.5MM for the company from their **** Division. Additionally, during my work in ****, the work on Association Analysis helped the the Executive Head of **** **** generate a cross-sell revenue of $2.3MM.
I have good experience of implementing machine learning solutions in Python, some of which can be found here.
I have also got the opportunity to work with big organizations or to be a founding member of starting a data science practice for a start-up. This varied role and responsibility has helped me shape into a self-starter in any endeavor I pursue.
I have enclosed my resume for your review. I would like the opportunity to share more about my qualifications and the ways in which I can contribute to the team.
<strong>詳細分析:</strong>
目的明確,故事完整,條理清晰,重點突出.
雖然英語語法並不完美但是意思已經非常清楚了。
我的教育背景,我目前的工作狀態,我的位置。
我會什麼數科方法,我會什麼工具,我做了什麼事情,我的職責是哪些。我的工作給公司帶來了哪些收益。
(buzz word也都hit到了,但是並沒有感覺只在堆砌術語。)
我的工作樣本(github link) (其實裡面只有MOOC類型的內容)
我的特殊之處
請看我的簡歷
結語
這種郵件,哪怕就是簡單的cold email, 得到回覆的概率也比簡簡單單的類型要高吧
恩,實實在在的跟三哥們學吹。共勉。
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