美本申請 優秀文書展示之七

2021-02-21 網絡會客廳

Renee(李睿鴻),史丹福大學2021屆學生。在當年的大學申請中斬獲了12所美國頂尖大學的offer,並被西北大學評為Murphy Scholar(墨菲學者),被芝加哥大學評為President's Scholar(總統獎學者),被哥倫比亞大學授予Davis Scholar(戴維斯學者)。

本文節選自Renee近日出版的新書《從北京到斯坦福》,此書不但可以作為藤校申請指南,也是美高就讀指南。

 

《從北京到斯坦福》購書連結 http://product.dangdang.com/25219803.html 


主文書

 

As soon as the warmth of the first dumpling filled mymouth, I thought I tasted home. At home, dumplings symbolize family gatheringswhere Grandma made the delicious fillings, Grandpa kneaded the dough whilehumming some tunes from a classic Beijing Opera piece, Dad cut the dough intosmall cubes, I rolled the cubes into dough wrappings, and Mom sealed in thefillings and added the dumplings into the boiling water. Indeed, with my「foodie」 habit of constant exploration, different dishes always recalldifferent memories for me. For example, Three Cups Chicken, a traditionalChinese dish, brings me back to childhood when I was awed by its special andluscious taste every time my grandparents made it. French crêpes and bananafondue trigger memories of Cooking Club at Middlesex with the image of abeautiful and relaxing Sunday afternoon during the winter, with friends arounda table at my advisor’s house. Nevertheless, no matter how much I enjoy allkinds of good food, Grandma’s dumplings have always remained at the top of mylist. Grandma has a recipe for the best dumplings in the world, a recipe I wasnever able to master even though I had tried many times by myself. I was almostpositive that she left out a secret ingredient when she wrote down the recipefor me.

When I first came to the U.S. for high school,everything was unfamiliar. As an adventurous fifteen-year-old, despite greatcuriosity and willingness to leave my home to explore, I was overwhelmed by thedaunting differences between the world I had lived in and this fascinating,albeit bewildering, environment. I still remember the shock I went through atthe first dance at Middlesex. I tried so hard to understand why it was nothinglike the waltz lessons I had taken in Beijing the summer before freshman yearas preparation for the high school dances I created in my mind according to oldAmerican movies and TV shows. I can also recall the surprise in my friends』eyes when I asked them what Reese’s Peanut Butter Cups were. The way everyoneparticipated in class was also completely different from my regimented classesin Beijing. During my first few months as a freshman, I secretly longed forsome element from home to appear in this alien life in which I sometimes feltlike I was marooned.

During my first Spring Festival — the traditionalChinese New Year — away from home, Mrs. Ku, the Chinese teacher at Middlesex,organized a dumpling-making event that was open to the entire school. I couldnot help thinking of my Grandma and her recipe for the best dumplings in theworld. Homesickness, sadness, and nostalgia filled me. But I put on a smile andtaught my excited friends and teachers how to make dumplings. As the dumplingsthat my friends made started to look more like dumplings than meatballs, mysharp sense of melancholy of being away from home melted away in the vapors ofthe boiling water and the laughter of my friends. I looked around the DiningHall and saw the lovely people with whom I made those dumplings; they were allsmiling and enjoying learning together. Despite the initial disbelief, Igradually began to see my family within the crowd! They were the people who madethe fillings, kneaded the dough, etc. As soon as I took the first bite from thewarm dumpling, an epiphany came to me. The reason I love dumplings so much doesnot really have to do with their tantalizing aroma, their succulence, or mylove for food; instead, the process of making them with the people whom I loveand cherish is what makes dumplings so special. The people are indeed thesecret ingredient of Grandma’s recipe.

 

分析:

1、這實際上是我的第三篇CommonApp的主文書。前兩篇都是在給每篇改過十幾二十遍之後發現遇到瓶頸,自己並不喜歡那個題材。所以,當我改到這第三篇最後一版的時候,實際上已經寫過三、四十篇,甚至四、五十篇的主文書了。所以當你對文書進行過四、五十遍的修改後,估計就能發現改到何時文章能令自己滿意。同樣,當你勇敢地對這篇文書進行過幾次大調整、大修改甚至重寫之後,當你遇到那個令自己怦然心動的題材,就一定不會錯過了。

我在寫前兩版主文書的時候,雖然也能勉強督促自己每天做一些修改、調整,但總是感覺再怎麼改還是很牽強,還是對這篇文章不滿意。然而,在我第二次開新文檔,從一張空白的紙開始重寫時,我想到了以上這篇文章的題材,並文思如泉湧,很快的便寫出了2000多字。CommonApp的主文書只需要最多650字,所以,後面我就只需要刪減了。

 

2、這篇文章適合我的原因,還要感謝我在Middlesex的升學顧問。因為在美高裡的顧問,許多人都需要負責二三十名學生。在我們學校,當時我被分配到的升學顧問需要負責40名學生。所以他們都十分繁忙,而且只有功夫給出比較籠統的建議,並沒有時間幫我們摳小細節。所以,我們一般都是在寫完文書之後拿給他們看,讓他們過目一下就可以定最終稿了。可是,當我把我的二版已經改過20遍的文章拿給他,並告訴他我心裡還是對這篇文章不滿意的時候,他並沒有嫌麻煩,而是很贊同我的說法,覺得我可以寫一篇更適合我的文章。

他說:「Renee,我覺得你現在的這篇文章有一點太academic(學術化)了。你的transcript(在校成績單)和StandardizedTesting(標化考試,SAT、AP等)已經非常強了,足以證明你在學術上的優勢。所以,你應該利用這篇文書的機會向招生官展現你自己在其他申請材料裡體現不出的一面。甚至可以故意寫一篇很淺顯易懂、文字比較simple(簡單)的文章來讓他知道你不是一個只重視學習的nerd(書呆子)。」

他的這一段話真真切切地給了我一種「聽君一席話,勝讀十年書」的感覺。於是,我通過排除法,把我在其他申請材料中已經體現過一次或多次的特質排除掉,剩下了幾個對我很重要、我想通過這篇文書體現的我的特點:curiosity(好奇心與求知慾)、adaptability(快速適應周圍環境的能力)、positivity(樂觀開朗的心態)、I’m a team player/part of a community(我是個喜歡集體生活、能與別人合作的人)等等。列出的這幾點都非常重要,因為這四點是許多美國大學認為中國學生不具備的能力,而我又恰恰具備這幾項十分重要的特質,所以,文書是一個把我從「中國學生」的stereotype(固定印象)set apart(區別出來)的最佳時機。

但是,比題材本身更重要的一點是這個題材對你的意義。千萬不要因為覺得招生官想看X就編造一個關於自己有X特點的事例。選材確實有技巧,但文章一定要真實。要相信,那些招生官們早就已經練就了火眼金睛的本領。你講的是真實故事,還是想矇混過關,他們一眼就能看出來。

 

3、我的advisor常說:「showing is more important thantelling」(通過具體事例看到的遠比自己口頭說的重要)。這句話在做人方面很有意義,而在寫作方面也不失為一個很精闢的建議。如果我口頭告訴招生官們我很樂觀、很堅強、很適合在社區裡和大家一起玩兒,他們一定很難記住,而且說不定還會本著「眼見為實、耳聽為虛」的觀念而對我說的話持懷疑態度。但是,當我通過講一個故事的方式向他們體現我的這些特質的時候,他們就會覺得很容易接受,而且是潛意識地認可我,因為在他們讀到故事中的每個情節時候會有自己的體會。比起被別人灌輸的理念,人們總是會更相信自己悟出的觀點。所以,當寫完文書之後,最好給一些對你有一定認知,但並不是非常了解的人看一看。如果連他們都覺得你是X、Y、Z樣的人,而你想表達的又恰恰是這三種特點,那麼你就成功了。

 

University of Chicago

「怪題目」 文書

 

為什麼要把UChicago的文書單拎出來呢?因為他們每年真的是「怪題百出」。UChicago的文書命題是以標新立異出了名的,而且每年都有至少五六個選項。比如:2017—2018年的六個選項是:

EssayOption 1:

「The aim of argument, or of discussion, should not bevictory, but progress.」 – Joseph Joubert

Sometimes, people talk a lot about popular subjects toassure 『victory』 in conversation or understanding, and leave behind topics ofless popularity, but great personal or intellectual importance. What do youthink is important but under-discussed?

-Anonymous Suggestion

 

EssayOption 2:

Due to a series of clerical errors, there is exactly onetypo (an extra letter, a removed letter, or an altered letter) in the name ofevery department at the University of Chicago. Oops! Describe your new intendedmajor. Why are you interested in it and what courses or areas of focus withinit might you want to explore? Potential options include Commuter Science,Bromance Languages and Literatures, Pundamentals: Issues and Texts, AntHistory…

-Inspired by Josh Kaufman, Class of 2018

 

EssayOption 3:

Earth. Fire. Wind. Water. Heart! Captain Planet supposesthat the world is made up of these five elements. We’re familiar with the previously-notedset and with actual elements like hydrogen, oxygen, and carbon, but select andexplain another small group of things (say, under five) that you believecompose our world.

-Inspired by Dani Plung, Class of 2017

 

EssayOption 4:

The late New York Times photographer Bill Cunninghamonce said "Fashion is the armor to survive the reality of everyday life. Idon’t think you could do away with it. It would be like doing away withcivilization." Tell us about your 「armor.」

-Inspired by Adam Berger, Class of 2020

 

EssayOption 5:

Fans of the movie Sharknado say that they enjoy itbecause 「it’s so bad, it’s good.」 Certain automobile owners prefer classic carsbecause they 「have more character.」 And recently, vinyl record sales haveskyrocketed because it is perceived that they have a warmer, fuller sound.Discuss something that you love not in spite of but rather due to its quirks orimperfections.

-Inspired by Alex Serbanescu, Class of 2021

 

EssayOption 6:

In the spirit of adventurous inquiry, pose your ownquestion or choose one of our past prompts. Be original, creative, thoughtprovoking. Draw on your best qualities as a writer, thinker, visionary, socialcritic, sage, citizen of the world, or future citizen of the University ofChicago; take a little risk, and have fun.

 

並且,他們對於Essay Prompt的靈活性很大,如果覺得對歷年的任意一個題目更感興趣,則可以選擇去寫那個題目,即使它並不包含在本年的prompts裡。我當時選擇的是一個本年命題:

2016-2017 Prompt: The ball isin your court—a penny for your thoughts, but say it, don’t spray it. So long as you don’t bite off more than youcan chew, beat around the bush, or cut corners, writing this essay should be apiece of cake. Create your own idiom, and tell us its origin—you know, thewhole nine yards. PS: A picture is worth a thousand words. -Inspired by AprilBell, Class of 2017, and Maya Shaked, Class of 2018 (It takes two to tango.)

 

以下是我的作文,這篇作文比我Common App的主文書要長一些,因為UChicago對文書並沒有字數限制。(本文在1天內完成,因為像講一個故事一樣,所以下筆的時候感覺很流暢,感覺停下來比繼續寫要難)。

 

With a big smile, I told my suite-mate Sophia, 「LetRainbow brighten your day!」 when she was frustrated after she saw the result ofthe election of Girls』 Varsity Tennis captain.

She looked at me with confusion: 「You mean the sun?」

「Nope, you heard it right, it’s Rainbow.」 I replied,happy to see that now she was distracted from the captain-election result.

「Oh, is this something like 『There’s always a rainbowafter the rain』?」 she asked.

「Well, that’s half of it,」 I replied, laughing at whatI’m about to tell her. 「You know how I told you I had two other English namesbefore 『Renee』?」

She nodded, trying to figure out a possible correlationbetween what I said and an English name.

「Well, the one right before 『Renee』 was 『Rosa』…」 I tooka deep breath and continued, 「And the first English name I gave myself was『Rainbow』!」

As expected, I saw her eyes widen, and within the nextsecond, she started laughing and said, 「Oh my gosh, that is so cute!」

「Hey, to be fair, I was in kindergarten, and 『Rainbow』was the most advanced English word I knew at that time, so I wanted to use itas my name.」 Pretending to protest her 「cruel derision,」 I felt a sense ofrelief and happiness, noticing that Sophia was now completely distracted fromnews about the captainship.

So, what exactly is the second half of the meaning ofthis self-made idiom? Part of it is the fact that when I tell people the storyabout my first English name to help them understand this phrase, the storyitself brightens their day because it is hilarious and unexpected. Who wouldchoose 「Rainbow」 as a name?  I would, ofcourse -- and everyone who knows me understands.  However, more importantly, the idiom is atestament to my deep commitment to choosing happiness and optimism and tobringing those gifts to the people around me.

The Middlesex community accepted me with warmth andencouragement when I first came to the U.S. and felt overwhelmed by a newculture. In return for the kind support, I strive to leave a trail of joy andlaughter every day whether it’s by enthusiastically participating in classdiscussions, popping into faculty members』 offices with a big smile to say 「hi」and chat, or supporting freshmen in the dorm to adjust to high school.Personally, my endless positive energy and enthusiasm came from the fact that Iview difficulties as challenges that I will conquer instead of hardshipsblocking me. Our Dean of Academics refers to me as 「the always smiley Ms.Anvil」 because I unconditionally share the joy I gained from my work asEditor-in-Chief of the school newspaper, the Anvil, with the Middlesexcommunity through my interviews, articles, and communications. Math club is ahighlight of every week. As a co-head, I encourage others to find as much funas I do in the process of collaboratively solving problems. I still rememberthe time when we drew blue and red balls all over the whiteboard to makesolving probability problems fun for our new members. Moreover, I try tocelebrate others』 achievements as if they were my own, and I think this attitudehas influenced my friends to be happy for each other’s successes. Therefore, Iam completely honest when I said, 「Let Rainbow brighten your day!」 because thatis what I try to do with my daily actions.

As it turns out, 「Let Rainbow brighten your day!」 doesn’tjust make other people feel happier; it also makes me feel freer. Born andraised in Beijing, I had drastically different experiences before and after Icame to Middlesex. Even though my academic transition was very smooth, thedaily communication part was not as quick to come along. A lot of times duringthe first two years, I would think of a normal saying in Chinese and realizethat I didn’t know how to exactly translate it into English, and then noticethat the conversation had already moved on when I was struggling to find aliteral translation. I realized afterwards that the moment I made up 「letRainbow brighten your day,」 I finally felt comfortable enough about my newenvironment and about myself to freely shout out what I wanted to express the momentI thought of it. After I mentioned this new idiom to my friends and told themthe background story about my first English name, Rainbow, they all found thisphrase super-fitting for the situation, and they loved the story so much thatthey started saying it to each other as general encouragement—「Don’t worry, letRainbow brighten your day!」

Everywhere I go, I aspire to bring the same positivitythat made a freshman proctee in my dorm say, 「I want to be a little Renee andbe happy all the time!」 and let Rainbow brighten everyone’s day!

 

分析:

    這篇文書適合我的原因和上一篇主文書的原因差不多。到最後,當我寫了十幾篇不同學校的文書之後發現,所有的好文書實際上都是通過同樣的理念寫出來的。主要就是要在保持真實度的前提下,爭取通過講故事的形式,讓招生官讀你的文書時自己能夠體會到你想要表現的特點。並且抓住寫文書的機會,通過自己的嘴和語言,講出一些其他申請材在保持真實度的前提下,爭取通過講故事的形式,讓招生官讀你的文書時自己能夠體會到你想要表現的特點。並且抓住寫文書的機會,通過自己的嘴和語言,講出一些其他申請材料中不能體現的關於你是怎樣一個人的新鮮論點,讓自己的形象變得更加鮮活。料中不能體現的關於你是怎樣一個人的新鮮論點,讓自己的形象變得更加鮮活。爭取能在自己由一堆成績、數字、獎項所塑造的二維(two-dimensional)人物的基礎上再加一個dimension(維度),在招生官的印象中由僅僅一個名字變成一個三維(three-dimensional)的真實人物。

 

Columbia Application

哥倫比亞大學問答和文書

 

還有一個學校的文書我覺得比較經典(classic/typical),而且也比較值得分享,那就是哥倫比亞大學的。因為他們在真正錄取結果出來前兩個月左右就給了我「Likely offer」(提前錄取),並且給了我每屆僅25人的「Davis Scholar」稱號。

 

What aspect of the Columbiacommunity, outside of the classroom, would you most want to impact and why? (150 words or less)

A positive attitude is a crucial ingredient for acohesive, successful community. Thus, I would most want to bring joy andlaughter to the community every day. I celebrate my friends' achievements as ifthey were my own and see challenges as special offers of infinite possibilitiesinstead of hardships to be endured. These understandings motivate me to bringpositive energy to everything I do, whether it’s compiling the schoolnewspaper, the Anvil, or rallying the troops in math club, or supportingfreshmen in the dorm to adjust to high school life. A positive attitude is aspowerful as anything that makes groups successful. My friends and teachers havetold me that I bring optimism and cheerfulness into their lives and alwaysbring out the best in them. I wish to add my positive energy and passion to theinclusive and exciting atmosphere outside of the classroom at Columbia.

 

List the titles of the required readings from coursesduring the school year or summer that you enjoyed most in the past year. (150words or less)

The Dead by James Joyce

Dante's Inferno

Shakespeare's Hamlet

The Money Men: Capitalism, Democracy, and the HundredYears' War Over the American Dollar by H. W. Brands

Beowulf

(Not during the past year but two other requiredreadings that I really enjoyed: Homer's The Iliad, and Jane Austen's Pride andPrejudice)

 

List the titles of the books you read for pleasure thatyou enjoyed most in the past year. (150 words or less)

The Book Thief by Markus Zusak

Madame Bovary by Gustave Flaubert

The World of Myth by David Adams Leeming

This I Believe: The Personal Philosophies of RemarkableMen and Women edited by Jay Allison and Dan Grediman

The Divergent series by Veronica Roth

 

List the titles of the print, electronic publicationsand websites you read regularly. (150 words or less)

CNN (electronic)

New York Times (electronic)

Time Magazine (print)

Wall Street Journal (electronic)

List the titles of the films, concerts, shows, exhibits,lectures and other entertainments you enjoyed most in the past year. (150 wordsor less)

TV Shows:

Pride and Prejudice (1995), Sherlock (BBC), Brain Games,Suits

Films:

Zootopia, The Readjustment Bureau, Finding Dory, SecretLife of Pets, Star Trek Beyond, Now You See Me 2, The Jungle Book, The TrumanShow (1998)

Performance:

Hamilton: An American Musical, 2016

Music:

Chopin (especially Nocturne Op.9 No.1 and No. 2,Nocturne Op. 27 No.2 in D-flat Major, Scherzo No. 2 in B flat minor Op. 31,「Fantasie」 Impromptu Op. 66, andValse Op. 69 No.2 in B minor);

Rachmaninoff Prelude Op. 32 No. 10 and No. 12;

Schubert-Liszt transcriptions (in general);

Beethoven Sonatas (especially Sonata Op.2 No.1 in Fminor, 「Moonlight」 Sonata, 「Tempest」 Sonata, and 「Waldstein」 Sonata);

Mozart Sonatas (especially K.330 and KV. 282)

 

Please tell us what you value most about Columbia andwhy. (300 words or less)

From Medieval Literature to Linear Algebra, from writingfor the school newspaper to enjoying problem-solving in Math Club, I have nevertried to define myself in just one way. Thus, it is reassuring to know thateven though I want to major in an engineering field, at Columbia, I can stillfollow my other interests and read and discuss Plato’s Republic and learn aboutart at the Met (one of my favorite places in the world ever since I went therefor the first time in fifth grade) through the College Core that’s open toengineering students. The availability of a liberal arts minor for an engineernot only satisfies my interdisciplinary interests but also feeds my curiosityand creativity, which are both important to solving real-world problems.

There are also wonderful research positions to work withprize-winning faculty reserved just for undergraduate engineers. ***********(This part is abbreviated in this book because it contains some personalprivacy). The Columbia Maker Space is perfect for such an aspiration since itprovides all students with equipment and training to design and fabricate theirown prototypes. Research and entrepreneurial opportunities such as STEP andFast Pitch Competitions can help me launch my project after I finish theprototype.

More importantly, Columbia is a place that focuses notonly on producing fantastic scholars, but also on cultivating good people whoare global citizens and global leaders. The Core curriculum ensures thatColumbia’s students not only are literarily mature, but also possess globalperspectives. Also, there are numerous volunteering opportunities, such asCommunity Impact for undergraduates to remember to give back to the worldaround them. Ultimately, it is this connection to helping others around theworld that draws me to engineering.

 

 

Stanford Application

史丹福大學申請問答和文書

 

Name your favorite books, authors, films, and/orartists. (50 word limit)

Books: Pride and Prejudice, Gone with the Wind, TheIliad, The Odyssey, The Book Thief, This I Believe, Percy Jackson series, TheLord of the Rings series, The Hunger Games series

Authors: Jane Austen, J.R.R. Tolkien, Xi Murong

Films: Mulan, Inception, The Truman Show

Artists/Musicians: Claude Monet, Chopin, Beethoven

 

What newspapers, magazines, and/or websites do youenjoy? (50 word limit)

News (electronic): CNN, The New York Times, Wall StreetJournal

Magazines: Time Magazine

Websites: YouTube, Amazon, National Geographic, Netflix,RTVE.es, Yahoo Finance

 

What is the most significant challenge that societyfaces today? (50 word limit)

While media spots problems within the society relativelyquickly nowadays, it is tempting to dwell on that we-found-the-problem stagewith a dangerous sense of relief without working to find real solutions.However, individuals need to take innovative actions to solve problems moreoften rather than only talking about them.

 

How did you spend your last two summers? (50 word limit)

As an international student, I spent at least one monthback home in Beijing each summer, where I visited friends and family, readbooks, played squash, etc. I spent last July at MIT’s Women's TechnologyProgram (WTP-EECS) where I explored the fascinating fields of ElectricalEngineering and Computer Science.

 

What were your favorite events (e.g., performances,exhibits, competitions, conferences, etc.) in recent years? (50 word limit)

Hamilton: An American Musical, 2016;

Nabucco (Opera), Beijing, 2013;

The Modern Myth: Drawing Mythologies in Modern Times,MoMA, 2010;

Model Congress trips, UPenn and Harvard, 2014, 2015,2016;

HiMCM (High School Mathematical Contest in Modeling);

World Conference: G20 Summit, 2016 (China and the U.S.announced ratification of Paris Agreement respectively).

 

What historical moment or event do you wish you couldhave witnessed? (50 word limit)

I want to witness the first official encounter betweenthe English merchants and the Chinese emperor in Qing dynasty. I have alwaysbeen curious about their interactions. Was there a translator? How did theygreet each other? Did the merchants kneel in front of the emperor like Chinesegovernmental officials?

 

What five words best describe you?

Positive, creative, intellectual, curious, genuine.

 

Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality.Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectualdevelopment. (100 to 250 words)

The final project for the Electrical Engineering courseof MIT’s Women’s Technology Program was to write codes for and create afunctional octave of the piano with aluminum foil 「keys」 on a cardboardconnected to a microcontroller-platform called the Arduino. However, uponcompletion of the single-octave piano, I found my performance restricted to"Doe-A-Deer" because of the limitation of the one octave. The keyproblem to creating more octaves was the Arduino’s limited number ofoutput-pins, which made it impossible to control more than 12 notes directly.

I turned to Google for some inspiration. As I was typingin my password, the Shift key caught my eye. A connection to the problem struckme: knowing that the Shift key redefines lowercase letters into uppercase, perhapssimilarly, I could redefine the note of each key on my piano by pressing acertain function button. Then, each physical foil key on the cardboard would beable to play at different octaves, surpassing the conundrum posed by thelimited number of output-pins. Once the idea took hold, I designed a computerprogram to incorporate two buttons in the circuit that would shift the notes ofall thirteen foil keys one octave up or down each time I pressed thecorresponding button.

 Thinking beyondthe most obvious, physical solutions, to solve problems with virtual creationis wonderful and exciting. I will keep looking for the hidden solutions tobigger problems so that one day, perhaps, my innovations will change everyone’slife for the better.

 

Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live oncampus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about youor that will help your roommate -- and us -- know you better. (100 to 250words)

 

Dear roomie,

I am so thrilled that we will be living together nextyear! I am an only child, so I love the experience of living with my 「sisters.」Thus, I spent three of my four years at Middlesex living in doubles and a quadwith my friends. You can always count on me to be fun and supportive! Minidance parties during study breaks, tooth brushing sessions after a long day,snow-flake making with hot chocolate, self-teaching lessons on how to say 「hi,my name is…」 in eleven languages just out of curiosity – my best memories ofhigh school are with my roommates. We had nightly chats in the common room,sitting (or lying) in a circle, about our childhoods. Now, my roommates are allhalf-experts in Chinese culture, even though they came from Massachusetts, NewHampshire, and Texas. My roommates have also discovered that no matter how myday was, I am always ready to listen to people around me. I am happy for theirachievements and sad for their disappointments, and in times of frustration, Ican always find ways to help them feel better. Maybe by telling them the storythat I picked my first English name to be 「Rainbow」 in elementary school, orthat I took waltz lessons before coming to the US thinking that’s what highschool dances are like ☺

I am confident that we will have a great adventuretogether!

Love,

Renee

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