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2012年上海高考英語滿分作文
2013-03-13 13:49
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描述你在學校的一次午餐,具體要求如下:
詳細描述用餐的情況
簡要表述你對這次午餐的感受
這是一篇簡單卻需要挖掘的文章,因為如果只是描述用餐情況,顯然缺乏深度,誇誇其談,流於表面。學生拿到這樣的題目需要仔細考慮用餐背後的東西。比較容易想到的話題是食物浪費、用餐衛生、餐桌禮儀等。在創作範文中,筆者另闢蹊徑,通過大多數同齡人用餐時的匆忙來襯託「我」的悠然自得,凸顯出在緊張的高中學生生涯中,作者能夠留有一片心靈淨土,通過飲食來調節情緒,更好地面對挑戰,表現出樂觀的人生態度。此文結構簡單,文筆清新,語言精準,並運用了高中階段常見的語法結構,不失為一個很好的作文模板,供學生借鑑。
範文:
The instant the bell indicating the endof the last class rang, out of the classroompoured all students but one。Unlikemy peers, Iwas in no hurry tomake a run for the school canteen, to rushthrough lunch and to return to the classroomfor homework. I arrived at the canteenwhen amassive queue had formed.Waitingformy turn patiently, I smelled the aroma ofthe appetizing food. Greasy as some dishesmight be, thewide range of food preparedby the schoolwas superior in nutritional val-ue to that found elsewhere。
The typical schedule of a highschooleris extraordinarily hectic and thus lunch breakis a rare timewhen overworked students canwind down and enjoy the pleasure providedby the flavorful food. Imake it a point topampermy taste buds by savoring every littlebit of taste in food.What I usually like todo over lunch is have amindless conversa-tionwith a couple of studentswho have alsolearnt to smell the roses along the bonebreaking journey through high school. Werounded off our lunch with a dessert, re-freshed and satisfied。Come to think of it, it is not the foodbutmy attitude towards life that affordsmepleasure and empowersme in facing up tovarious challenges。(219words)
一、語法解構
現在分詞作定語 the bell indicating theend of the last class rang
倒裝句
(1)out of the classroom pouredall students but one
(2)Greasy as some dishesmight be
不定式 Iwas in no hurry to make arun for the school canteen
狀語從句 I arrived at the canteenwhenamassive queue had formed。
現在分詞作狀語 Waiting formy turnpatiently,
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