考試時間緊壓力大?讀完寫作題大腦一片空白?動筆時能想一句算一句?匆匆忙忙湊滿250個詞?現在我也可以拿下7分,快跟我看看我做過什麼?雅思寫作從大腦一片空白到拿下7分,我到底用了幾步
「別說了,寫完我自己都看不下去」
「那你打算雅思寫作拿多少分?
「雅思寫作是最拉分的單項你知道伐?」
「別說了」
還記得小編之前給大家介紹過的:我在雅思寫作均分5.34分的中國大陸考了一次雅思…新航道寫作7分名師劉靜老師給大家介紹了一些寫作7分同學的備考案例,但有些同學表示「道理我都懂,但我拿到題目就是沒想法怎麼辦嘛!」
首先你需要明白,如果你的作文思路混亂,邏輯不清晰,會直接影響考官對TR以及CC的打分,詞彙語法再亮眼,起到的加持作用也十分略微。
是的,短時間內有思路真的很難,所以你一定要學會立馬掌握有寫作思路的方法
——「批判性思維critical thinking」
「Critical thinking is the ability to apply reasoning and logic to new or unfamiliar ideas, opinions, and situations. Thinking critically involves seeing things in an open-minded way and examining an idea or concept from as many angles as possible.」
其實批判性思維並不複雜,並不是對任何話題都要持質疑的態度,運用在雅思寫作中其實就在於無論個人立場是什麼,都能夠從多個角度、多個層面上找到支撐自己立場的依據,在向考官解釋這些依據時更細緻更有層次感。
聽起來有點複雜?別怕,我們一步一步來修煉「批判性思維critical thinking」
例題:
With the increasing demand for energy resources of oil and gas, people should look for resources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas?
Critical thinking修煉第一級
謀篇:確定立場(agree/disagree,pros/cons...)及文章框架
首先看題型:利弊
確定立場:the downsides prevail over the merits弊大於利
接著我們來想想框架吧:四段論
Introduction
body 1(益處-控制篇幅)
body 2(弊端)
conclusion
Critical thinking修煉第二級
立意:概括agree或disagree的大致理由(分論點)
Body 1(開發偏遠地區能源的益處是什麼?)
注意:思考觀點時,並不需要劍走偏鋒,得出很直觀具有代表性的觀點就可以了
觀點:緩解能源危機(ease the energy crisis)
得出大致段落中心句:Targeting at the potential energies in unexploited areas can ease the energy crisis.
Critical thinking修煉第三級
能夠充分展開論證分論點的合理性
展開觀點句,注意展開的內容一定要與觀點保持一致,不可偏離。
觀點:開發偏遠地區能源最大的益處在於緩解能源危機(ease the energy crisis)
腦內過程:開發偏遠地區能源-->能帶來益處-->能緩解能源危機-->那為什麼要到偏遠地區去開發呢,不偏遠地區不行嗎?-->結合生活-->噢,不偏遠地區不夠用了-->為什麼不夠用了?-->人們需求原來越大啊-->沒辦法只能轉移開採地域-->結束了嗎?-->沒有,偏遠地區一定有很多能源嗎?-->不一定(為下文埋伏筆),但死馬當活馬醫吧,萬一夠多呢--> 能源危機有救了!
熟練之後,可以更迅速地得出一套有邏輯的key words思維導圖:(因為)resources being exhausted-->(因此為了)meet people’s increasing demand--> shift target-->(如果)exist abundant resources--> energy crisis being eased
Critical thinking修煉第四級
胸有成竹步入考場,各大話題信手拈來
結構第一步,邏輯第二步,表達第三步。
把握住清晰的結構和邏輯,我們的銜接詞彙語法才能夠一展用武之地。
The most direct benefit of targeting at the potential energies in unexploited areas, evidently, lies in easing the energy crisis confronted by almost every country. Specifically, the fact is that resources like coal and petrol oil are going to be exhausted in a near future, hence for the sake of meeting the increasing population’s demand, it seems more feasible to utilize those from where people have not yet set foot in. If by any chance there exist abundant resources, energy crisis would no longer be worrisome.
利用這些步驟,我們繼續完成主體第二段:
Step 1--段落
開發偏遠地區能源會帶來更多嚴重弊端
Step 2--觀點
觀點1:費人力費物力
觀點2:破環當地生態
Step 3--思維導圖
觀點1-->(思考為什麼偏遠地區較其他而言有什麼特徵,使得它格外費人力物力)
偏遠地區--> (等同於)破村莊/大森林/草原/大海--> (意味著)科技落後/沒有設備-->(因此會)耗費大量人力物力-->能源豐富就算了,那(假設)費勁後發現能源量少而得不償失呢?
remote areas --> undeveloped deep oceans or extensive deserts--> equal those with poor or even no advanced facilities--> energy exploitation costs generous labour and financial forces--> what if there is not as much energy as expected
觀點2-->(思考為什麼在偏遠地區開發能源會破壞大自然)
其實不管是不是偏遠地區--> 開發能源都會破環環境--> 只是偏遠地區很多時候意味著大海/森林/草原等--> 需要格外在意環境問題-->(扣題舉例)大海裡鑽石油會汙染海水--> 森林裡開採天然氣勢必要砍樹
Tapping resources--> jeopardize the natural environment--> drilling for oil in the ocean--> pollutes the marine water--> extracting natural gas--> leads to deforestation
Step 4--擴充細節,形成段落
Nevertheless, provided this practice indeed is carried out, even more problems would emerge. For one thing, remote areas basically equal those with poor or even no advanced facilities, not to mention in the undeveloped deep oceans or extensive deserts, by which I mean energy exploitation would cost generous labour and financial forces. Meanwhile, what if there is not as much energy as expected after long term input? Apart from this, tapping resources would inevitably jeopardize the natural environment. For example, it is always drilling for oil in the ocean that pollutes the marine water and it is extracting natural gas(開採天然氣) that leads to deforestation.
相信你已經通過思維導圖方法學會批判性思維critical thinking啦!再加強一下,看看新航道老師會如何批改你的作文呢!
學生習作:
「Building the gap of wealth would be an effective strategy for achieving social harmony. The fact that poor feel treated unfairly would causes less motivation for them to keep their way on life and complain more. In this way, the poor will have resentment toward the affluent, which makes them behave in an anti-social way. This is particularly true when it comes to the poor who commit crime and this phenomenon poses a threat to social stability.」
理一下段落key words思路:
中心觀點:縮小貧富差距有助於社會和諧。
展開論證:窮人收到不公對待--> 缺少生活動力+抱怨--> 仇富--> 反社會--> 犯罪--> 危害社會穩定
供參考的思路修改:縮小貧富差距有助於社會和諧--> 原因--> 社會不穩定的重要因素之一--> 犯罪--> 大部分都是由窮人犯下--> 他們這麼做的原因在於在社會上受到不公對待--> 具體說例如 難以享受和富人一樣的教育和就業機會,甚至日常生活也受歧視--> which滋生了他們的反社會情緒--> 因此,如果能夠有效控制貧富差距--> 控制犯罪率--> 社會穩定
聽了這麼多,雅思寫作從大腦一片空白到拿下7分,我到底用了幾步?你們都知道了吧。我知道你們都懂了 ,那就要好好複習了哈。2018剩下的日子祝大家都可以取得好成績哦!