新東方網雅思頻道邀請特約作者薛鵬老師大家分享原創雅思寫作語料庫系列文章,幫助考生思路拓展,積累精彩寫作語料。
【健康類】:
Staying healthy by playing sports and eating well should be an individual’s duty to society rather than a habit for personal benefits. Do you agree or disagree? 保持健康是個人對於社會的責任,但是,不是使個人受益的良好習慣,是否認同?
相關提問:
【健康類】:
1. Some people believe that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others believe it is individuals』 responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. 有人認為政府有責任保障人們的健康飲食,有人認為健康飲食是個人的責任,討論兩種觀點,給出你的意見。
2. Some people believe that improving public health should increase the number of sports facilities. But others believe that it has little effects and needs other measures should be taken. Discuss both views and give your own opinion 有人認為提高公眾健康應該提高體育設施的數量,有人這種做法效果有限,應該採取其他方式,討論兩種觀點,給出你的意見。(2009年2月28日)
【頭腦風暴導言】:
失去你,擁有世界又如何,這個你,就是我們每人的健康管理。每天運動一小時,健康工作50年,幸福生活一輩子,這才是我們值得秉承的人生格言。
個人保持健康,提高工作效率,創造社會財富,減少消耗社會醫療資源,因此,這是履行社會責任。
贏的五個偏幫部首為: 亡、口、月、貝、凡。月字指的就是我們的健康管理,健康,使人精力充沛地應對學業、事業的挑戰,樂觀地實現家庭的和諧。財富不能保障健康,健康卻可以創造財富。身心健康,家人無憂,生活快樂,因此,保持使人人受益,是應該培養並堅持的良好習慣。
【文章布局】:
首段:背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場
二段:讓步原題觀點的合理性
三段:反駁原題觀點之不合理
尾段:再次亮明觀點 +(總結理由)
【作家立場】: 保持健康是個人和政府的責任,但是,個人應該承擔更多的責任。
【思路拓展】:
為何保持健康是履行社會責任:
① 保持身體健康是個人履行社會責任的體現,因為這減少了對於國家醫療資源的消耗,國家就有財政預算解決其他民生問題。
② 如果個人的健康沒有保障,難以勝任工作挑戰,亦無法為社會發展做出應有貢獻。相反,健康的公民可以創造社會財富,為國家發展注入新鮮活力。因此,是個人社會責任的體現。
為何保持健康是良好的個人習慣:
① 對於個人的利好:增強自信,減少憂慮,培養樂觀人生態度。健康者通常為熱愛運動者,通過運動可結實好友,這就意味著快樂源泉之增加。
② 對於家庭的利好:可以想像,個人健康狀況令人擔憂,家人必然痛苦和擔憂(例如企業家和文體明星),因此,個人健康可以使人樂觀地實現家庭的和諧。
③ 對於事業、學業的利好:個人健康可以提高學習和工作效率,使人精力充沛地應對事業的挑戰。
【小鵬哥語料庫】:
1. keep fit = remain healthy = stay healthy v 保持健康
2. have a reasonable health management v 有良好的健康管理
3. …… can instill confidence into one’s heart = build up one’s self-confidence v ……可以增強人的自信
4. strengthens one’s immune system v增強人的免疫系統
5. enhance one’s health index v提高人的健康指數
6. Happiness lies,first of all,in health 健康是幸福人生的本源。
7. If citizens can strengthening physical exercise and keep a wholesome dietary habit, then their perfect health index can be maintained. In this sense, it will greatly diminish the consumption of social health medical resources. 如果公民可以加強體育鍛鍊,保持健康飲食,他們可以保持良好的健康指數。從這個意義上講,這會減少社會醫療資源的消耗。
8. Keeping fit is indispensable factor for improving people’s quality of life 保持健康對於提高人們的生活質量而言,是不可缺少的因素。
9. It is unshakable duty of every individual to embark on a healthier lifestyle v開始健康的生活方式, 是人人不可推卸的責任。
10. Health makes one brave career challenges energetically and harmonize family life optimistically. 健康使人經歷充沛地應對事業的挑戰,樂觀地實現家庭和和諧。
【範文賞析】:
{首段}:背景介紹 + 爭議焦點 + 作家立場
Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. However, people have been pondering, for many years, the significance of maintaining personal health without reaching any definite consensus. A popular belief is that personal health only serves the good of the community. As I see it,optimizing personal health could not only benefit the society,but importantly,conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity.
【解析】:
1. Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. 健康對於每個人,如同花香對於花朵。
2. a popular belief is that ……一種流行的觀點就是……
3. optimizing personal health v 完善個人健康
4. conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity v有助於個人生活,家庭和睦,事業輝煌
{二段}:為何保持健康是盡到了社會責任
Indeed, I have to concede that keeping fit could be of great benefits for a nation and therefore be deemed as the personal obligation to the community. In other words, As for the country,the increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. Also, health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. It is conceivable that the increase of healthy social citizens can help create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further prosperity of a nation.
【解析】:
1. could be of great benefits for a nation v對於國家有利好
2. The increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. 健康公民的增加會減少社會公共醫療的消耗。
3. Health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. 健康意味著健良好的心態和充沛的體能。
4. create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further development of a nation v 創造巨大的價值,為國家的發展注入新鮮活力。
{三段}:為何保持健康對於個人有利好
Nevertheless,every individual could become the beneficiary of keeping fit too. First, a man with sound physique and mentality succeed better at work,respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. Secondly, health could, to a large extent, enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. For example, many entrepreneurs or super stars usually suffer from various health-related problems due to excessive workload and huge mental pressure. It is conceivable that one’s poor health condition will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members. Last, remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study.
【解析】:
1. Every individual could become the beneficiary of …… 人人都可以成為……的受益者
2. A man with sound physique and mentality people succeed better at work,respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. 身心健康者工作更有成效,積極應對壓力,較少沮喪,可以實現更多個人目標。
3. …… enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. …… 使人精力充沛地應對事業的挑戰,以及樂觀地實現家庭的和諧。
4. …… will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members …… 不可避免地給健康帶來巨大的痛苦
5. Remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study. 保持健康使人恢復體能,清醒頭腦,因此,提高工作和學習的效率。
尾段:再次亮明觀點:
In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. Therefore, embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us.
【解析】:
1. Keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. 保持健康,不僅僅是和社會責任相關,同時,於個人幸福相關,而後者,意義更加重要。
2. Embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us. 培養健康的生活方式應該每個人應該堅持的終生的習慣。
【全文點評】:
本篇個性開篇,主題明確、邏輯清晰、細節飽滿、詞彙豐富、句型簡潔,符合雅思寫作評分標準,可為考生研讀賞析之佳作,建議童鞋打造屬於自己的原創範文。
作者介紹:
薛鵬(@雅思小鵬哥),新東方網專欄作家,高中時代出版詩文集《選擇堅強》,每年創作20萬字原創語料庫以及範文。吉林大學外國語言學及應用語言學碩士。17年英語教學經驗 (7年新東方雅思託福SAT教學經歷),前長春新東方功勳教師,多次培訓出雅思和託福高分學員(雅思寫作8.0分,託福寫作29分)。
愛生活,愛運動,愛音樂電影,愛旅行美食,愛讀書攝影,更愛英語教學。20歲登上英語講臺,主講英語萬詞速記課程。熟悉GRE、TOEFL、SAT、TEM、CET等各級別詞彙教學。
大一時即在報刊雜誌上主持「英語學習系列談」以及「薛鵬教你學單詞」等專欄。2006年獲得「外研社/朗文杯」新概念背誦大賽吉林省賽區大學成人組冠軍,全國總決賽大學成人組二等獎。
對於各類寫作課程有精深研究,授課方式行雲流水,妙語連珠,知識底蘊深厚,對學員極具有啟迪性和激勵性。
教學理念:Education is not the filling of a pail but the lighting of a fire.(教育不是注滿一桶水,而是點燃一把火)
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