假設你是紅星中學高三學生李華。請根據以下四幅圖的先後順序，以「Concert at the Balcony」為題，用英語寫一篇短文向校刊「英語園地」投稿，記述上周末發生在你們小區的一個真實故事。
注意：詞數不少於60。
今年海澱二模主要以參加「陽臺音樂會」為主題，既貼合考生們的日常生活，又緊跟當下熱點。四幅圖的要點分別是：同學們首先要注意審圖，切忌審錯、審漏圖內的要點和細節；第二，在保證要點齊全的前提下,適當添加細節，注意情節的連貫性，同時關注文章開篇概括內容、結尾主題升華【睦鄰友好】。第三，文章中要體現句式的多樣性、以及用詞的準確性和豐富性。在適當增加長難句的同時，需要對非謂語動詞、三大從句及特殊句式進行靈活運用。另外，寫完之後要注意檢查，避免低級語法錯誤和單詞拼寫錯誤。Concert at the Balcony要點
琴聲入耳(heard the music)：
上周日/書房/寫作業/窗外美妙柔和的小提琴聲/心情（無聊，放鬆，緩解疲勞……）
last Sunday, study, homework, soft/pleasant music of the violin, bored,
relaxed, refreshed…
循聲而至(located/spotted the player)
走到陽臺/對面小夥子在陽臺上拉小提琴,專注陶醉/曲聲悠揚/興奮不已
wandered to the balcony, played the violin, across from, beautiful melody, was immersed/ lost in music, absorbed/thrilled
合奏演唱/舉辦音樂會(sang & played/concert)
紛紛加入：小姑娘彈奏吉他/應聲而和/我不禁低聲吟唱(引吭高歌)，
歌聲美妙，像舞臺上真正演唱的專業歌手和樂手一樣，認真投入，
盡情表演，就像臺下有眾多觀眾矚目
joined, played the guitar, sang to the music/ rhythm, hummed, sang at the top of my voice/ heartily, melodious/pure voice, staged a live concert as if on a stage with audience, performed to my heart’s content, the flowing melody & youthful passion left me with an endless aftertaste
揮手致意/鼓掌/告別(waved/clapped /said goodbye)
一曲終了,音樂盛宴，心滿意足，意猶未盡，相約下次
came to an end, a feast of music, was reluctant to leave, looked forward to
主題升華
音樂讓人放鬆、陶醉
音樂有如粘合劑/橋梁，把鄰裡聚集在一起，讓鄰裡關係和諧、自然、親切
音樂的魅力（感染力，凝聚力，激勵……）
發現美無處不在
積極參與美、創造美
打造和諧生活（鄰裡關係）……
評分原則
要點齊全，有話可說，細節，情感
生成性、即興創作
基本功
第一檔（18-20分）
完全完成了試題規定的任務。
覆蓋所有內容要點。
運用了多樣的句式和豐富的詞彙。
語法結構或詞彙方面有些許錯誤，但為盡力使用較複雜結構或較高級詞彙所致；體現了較強的語言運用能力。
有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文內容連貫、結構緊湊。
完全達到了預期的寫作目的。
20分
語言生動，富有美感
行文流暢，一氣呵成
立意新穎，書寫清爽
有個別時態錯誤，堪稱佳作。
20分
語言形象生動，句式豐富飽滿，結合疫情建群、舉辦音樂會合理，自圓其說。
個別語言錯誤，瑕不掩瑜。
19分
開頭新穎；內容詳實；情感豐富；首尾呼應
19分
句式詞彙豐富，過渡銜接自然。（粗心）
18分
語言流暢，靈活運用積累，句式詞彙，訓練有素。
複習建議
1.分析
2.提升
3.穩定
4.衝刺
主題明確、結構清晰,要點準確、細節合理
基本功（拼寫+基本句式）；非智力因素（書寫，分段，縮進，…）
有效訓練，少講精煉，分析文本；改寫、重寫；閱讀和完形中積累整理
翻譯：詞組細節
銜接情感
……
2．評分時，先根據文章的內容和語言質量初步確定其檔次，然後以該檔次的要求來衡 量，確定或調整檔次，最後給分。3．評分時應考慮：內容要點的完整性、上下文的連貫、詞彙和句式的多樣性及語言的 準確性。4．拼寫、標點符號或書寫影響內容表達時，應視其影響程度予以考慮。英、美拼寫及 詞彙用法均可接受。Last weekend, an unexpected concert at the balcony made my day.上周末，陽臺上一場意想不到的音樂會讓我很開心。On Sunday afternoon, when I was taking a break from my schoolwork, a clearmelody flowed in from the outside. It magically refreshed my tired mind and aroused my curiosity.Hoping to find its source, I went to the balcony. A young man was playing hisviolin on the balcony across from mine, his eyes half closed in full enjoyment of the tune. Amazed by his playing, I listened on and was absorbed.Unexpectedly, to the melody of the violin was added a wonderful chord of guitarfrom another neighbor. At this scene, I couldn’t help singing along and was surprisedwhen a girl also joined with her pure voice of a child. We hardly knew one another,but in our perfect harmony, we felt like old friends connected by our shared love ofmusic. Our little concert went on and on, fascinating the whole community.With a closing chord on the guitar, the concert ended. We smiled and waved toeach other as if we had just woken up from a sweet dream of music. Our shared memory of the concert at the balcony would not fade away, from which I felt the power of music to inspire and connect people. 隨著吉他的結束和弦，音樂會結束了。我們微笑著向對方揮手，仿佛我們剛從音樂的美夢中醒來。我們對陽臺音樂會的共同記憶不會淡忘，從中我感受到了音樂的力量，它鼓舞著人們，將人們聯繫在一起。(213 words)Last weekend, a special concert took place in my neighborhood. The uplifting music and heartwarming neighborliness kept resonating in my mind.上周末，在我家附近舉行了一場特別的音樂會。令人振奮的音樂和溫馨的鄰裡情誼一直在我的腦海中迴蕩。Last Saturday afternoon, I was bored at home doing homework when a piece of beautiful music flowed into my room and refreshed me immediately. Since the outbreak of the virus, everything has gone virtual, so I hurried to my balcony to check it out.The melody led me to locate the violinist in seconds: a teenage boy playing My Motherland and I on his balcony. Although it was not perfect, the organic sound of the violin and his deep affection stunned me. I was lost in his music. Before I realized it, aguitar joined! The guitar from a young lady downstairs gave the music a more livelytone. I couldn’t help humming the familiar tune when I suddenly heard someone singing clearly and cheerfully. There was another girl volunteering as the vocalist ofthis mini band! Inspired by all of them, I started singing loudly. The four of us stageda live balcony concert as if on a stage with audience!When the concert came to an end, we applauded each other’s wonderful performance and waved at each other enthusiastically. 「Take care!」 「Looking forwardto the next performance!」 were echoing in the community.As the whole nation and even the whole world were struggling to get used to life with restrictions while fighting against the virus, lots of fabulous ideas were produced to boost people’s morale. This heartening balcony concert in my neighborhood truly entertained me and rallied the optimistic spirit. 當整個國家，甚至整個世界都在努力適應有限制的生活的同時，與病毒作鬥爭，產生了許多令人難以置信的想法來鼓舞人們的士氣。在我家附近的這個令人振奮的陽臺音樂會確實給我帶來了歡樂，鼓舞了我樂觀的精神。(263)【劉凱老師解析】【分析】這是一篇記敘文，要求學生根據圖片敘述上周末發生在小區的一個真實故事。體裁：應用文；時態：根據提示，時態應為一般過去時。總分法指把主題句作總說，把經過作為分說，並以這種方式安排所寫內容。1）是誰？2）在哪裡？3) 發生了什麼？4) 結果如何？take a break from；refresh one’s mind；arouse one’s curiosity；be amazed by；at this scene；couldn’t help doing；each other；as if；fade away1. Last weekend, an unexpected concert at the balcony made my day.2. On Sunday afternoon, when I was taking a break from my schoolwork, a clear melody flowed in from the outside.3. It magically refreshed my tired mind and aroused my curiosity.4. Hoping to find its source, I went to the balcony.5. A young man was playing his violin on the balcony across from mine, his eyes half closed in full enjoyment of the tune.6. Amazed by his playing, I listened on and was absorbed.7. Unexpectedly, to the melody of the violin was added a wonderful chord of guitar from another neighbor.8. At this scene, I couldn’t help singing along and was surprised when a girl also joined with her pure voice of a child.9. We hardly knew one another, but in our perfect harmony, we felt like old friends connected by our shared love of music.10. Our little concert went on and on, fascinating the whole community.11. With a closing chord on the guitar, the concert ended.12. We smiled and waved to each other as if we had just woken up from a sweet dream of music. 13. 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